Irritation is a sign of quality in a poem. It is in a haiku as well, when the irritation belongs to the scene (my 50 ct). Here the picture is friendly and the verse is tough - and it was me who forgot to say: good one, Lorraine!
LL, __Your senryu reached me deeply, as did the photo... your haiga. __The girl in her fetal position, the tenderness of the lass with the slight smile... her gentle care. __The dichotomy may be, they are homeless by choice... run-a-ways? It matters little, as the hopeful sadness overcomes. Doug
I know you do Brian, but my thinking here, party girls, look at them, they look cared for, the clothes are new and stylish and in fashion, maybe one-day runaways or partied a little too much..I've never seen them again :)
You can be silly Comrade!
Ralf you are a sweetie, you saw my insecurity under the smile lol thanks so much, I always love how easily you do those things, haigas, tankus...tankas....I thought a haiga or is it tanka was photo with words...not sure which is which and thank you for the 'irritating' compliment ;)
Doug, thanks so much I love your comment, this is one of my favourite photos, I don't think they're runaways, because they look too well cared for, and yes that slight smile on the girls face to me was priceless as the young girl's curved back...pray tell what IS a senryu I though a haiga was words and photo and a haiku just words...but you called dit a senryu...?
Thanks very much Arlene, isn't the girl's smile as she bends a wonder x
__My opinions rarely count, and are simply that, opinions. The opinions of others, should not be overlooked.
My view, briefly. __Senryu allows social, religeous, moral issues, while haiku refers more to nature and its relationship with people, both can show humor.
Your opinions count a lot to me Doug and finally I understand, thank you! now that I recall most of what I've read on blogs are haikus, hmmm good to know, thanks so much for taking the time to explain it to me....
__I hope you understand, LL, I consider myself a single Smelt in a very large school... and not a master of that school. __But even a lowly Smelt can have a view that, needen't be infused on other fish in that ocean. Doug.
Gotcha _m, have no fear, i will not consider you a Master of all written things lol but really I finally understood, and I aprpeciate the fact that someone shed some light on it for me!
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Irritating haiga. Romantic, tragedy or fantasy? The viewer sees young airiness, but the reader hits on line three at the latest. Makes me think a lot.
Best wishes
Ralf
Great first Haiga I write that I actually like, and you find it irritating...lol thanks so much Ralf ;)
hummm... it must really rough on her back ! and cold too ;-)
picture says a lot, love the random photo-journalist shot...
A little ethereal - it's lovely!
I like how the sleeping girl is oblivious to the activity around her. Loved the line "her back curves".
Oh my, this made me sad!
And what an amazing photo!
Love all you share dear Lorraine!
You touch my heart!
Margie x
And it's a wonderful haiga!
It really is!
You are so talented and creative!
Margie :)
Merci beaucoup Dominique ;)
thanks a lot bje, would you believe none of them noticed me lol
Thanks a lot Jannie, I love that you visit here :)
Thanks for the compliment Talon ;)
and you dear Margie are a breath of fresh air ;) thank you always :)
i have a huge heart for the homeless...to see kids in that situation, breaks it...
when i saw this in thumbnail i thought it looked like some naughty gnomes
Irritation is a sign of quality in a poem. It is in a haiku as well, when the irritation belongs to the scene (my 50 ct). Here the picture is friendly and the verse is tough - and it was me who forgot to say: good one, Lorraine!
Best wishes
Ralf
LL,
__Your senryu reached me deeply, as did the photo... your haiga.
__The girl in her fetal position, the tenderness of the lass with the slight smile... her gentle care.
__The dichotomy may be, they are homeless by choice... run-a-ways? It matters little, as the hopeful sadness overcomes. Doug
That feels so loving to me. I'd like to be experiencing that - for just a few seconds, though; her position also looks a little uncomfortable.
Une très belle image journalistique Lorraine!
I know you do Brian, but my thinking here, party girls, look at them, they look cared for, the clothes are new and stylish and in fashion, maybe one-day runaways or partied a little too much..I've never seen them again :)
You can be silly Comrade!
Ralf you are a sweetie, you saw my insecurity under the smile lol thanks so much, I always love how easily you do those things, haigas, tankus...tankas....I thought a haiga or is it tanka was photo with words...not sure which is which and thank you for the 'irritating' compliment ;)
Doug, thanks so much I love your comment, this is one of my favourite photos, I don't think they're runaways, because they look too well cared for, and yes that slight smile on the girls face to me was priceless as the young girl's curved back...pray tell what IS a senryu
I though a haiga was words and photo and a haiku just words...but you called dit a senryu...?
Thanks very much Arlene, isn't the girl's smile as she bends a wonder x
Merci beaucoup Richard :)
__My opinions rarely count, and are simply that, opinions. The opinions of others, should not be overlooked.
My view, briefly.
__Senryu allows social, religeous, moral issues, while haiku refers more to nature and its relationship with people, both can show humor.
Your opinions count a lot to me Doug and finally I understand, thank you! now that I recall most of what I've read on blogs are haikus, hmmm good to know, thanks so much for taking the time to explain it to me....
__I hope you understand, LL, I consider myself a single Smelt in a very large school... and not a master of that school.
__But even a lowly Smelt can have a view that, needen't be infused on other fish in that ocean. Doug.
Gotcha _m, have no fear, i will not consider you a Master of all written things lol but really I finally understood, and I aprpeciate the fact that someone shed some light on it for me!
nice one
being able to sleep anywhere is a gift.
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